常熟英語培訓班 怎樣使句子多樣化
77 2017-06-16
一篇好文章的條件很多。除了內容豐富和組織緊密之外,詞匯的運用和句子的處理,也起著決定性作用。
句子可長可短,同一件事,可以用不同的句式表達。如果句子清一色是簡單句,文章必定很單調乏味。如果全篇充滿了冗長的復雜句,讀起來也很費力。最好的方法是以簡單句為基礎,配合適當的并列句和復雜句。簡單句可長可短,通常要加些附屬成分,如分詞短語、介詞短語、副詞短語、不定式動詞短語,以及節(jié)縮成分。
總之,作者可根據情況,使句子多樣化,使文章靈活多姿。例如下列五個句子的基本概念一樣,但是句式不同,內容重點也有些差別:
(1)thegoatsgrazedpeacefullyinthefarmandwereunawareoftheapproachinghunter.(并列分句(1)+2)
(2)grazingpeacefully,thegoatsinthefarmwereunawareoftheapproachinghunter.(現在分語短語+簡單句)
(3)inthefarm,thegoatsgrazedpeacefullyandwereunawareoftheapproachinghunter.(副詞短語+并列分句(1)-(2))
(4)thereweregoatsgrazingpeacefullyinthefarm,unawareoftheapproachinghunter.(簡單句+形容語短語)
(5)asthegoatsgrazedpeacefullyinthefarm,theywereunawareoftheapproachinghunter.(原因副詞從句+主句)
(1)和(5)的句式最常見;如果加上其他三種互相交替,句子不是更多樣化嗎?
最后,看看這兩個句子要如何多樣化呢?
(6)theyoungpilotwasonhisfirstoverseastraining.
(7)hefeltveryuneasy.
(a)theyoungpilotonhisfirstoverseastrainingfeltveryuneasy.
(b)theyoungpilotfeltveryuneasyduringhisfirstoverseastraining.
?theyoungpilot'sfirstoverseastrainingmadehimfeelveryuneasy.
(d)extremeuneasinessseizedtheyoungpilotonhisfirstoverseastraining.
(e)theyoungpilotwasonhisfirstoverseastraining,feelingveryuneasy.
(f)itbeinghisfirstoverseastraining,theyoungpilotfeltveryuneasy.
(g)beingonhisfirstoverseastraining,theyoungpilotfeltveryuneasy.
(h)theyoungpilotwasonhisfirstoverseastrainingandfeltveryuneasy.
(i)theyoungpilot,whowasonhisfirstoverseastraining,feltveryuneasy.
(j)whentheyoungpilotwasonhis/firstoverseastrainging,hefeltveryuneasy.
(k)astheyoungpilotwasonhisfirstoverseastraining,hefeltveryuneasy.
(l)theyoungpilotwasonhisfirstoverseastraining,sothathefeltveryuneasy.
在上述12個句子中,(a)-(g)是簡單句;(h)是并列句;(i)-(l)是復雜句。簡單句除(b)和(g)之外,其他五樣,用的人并不多。人們最喜歡采用復雜句,尤其是(j)和(k)這兩款;接著便是并列句(h)。如果大多數人的句子只限于(b),(g),(h),(j)和(k)這五種,而其他的則棄如敝屣,不是很可惜嗎?
增強英語語句表現力的有效方法
一、避免使用語意弱的“be”動詞。
1、把句中的表語轉換為不同的修飾語。例如:
weak:thetreesarebare.thegrassisbrown.thelandscapeseemsdrab.
revision:thebrowngrassandbaretreesformadrablandscape.(轉換為前置定語)
or:thelandscape,bareandbrown,beggedforspringgreen.(轉換為并列結構作后置定語)
2、將作表語用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯釉~。例如:
1)weak:theteammembersaregoodplayers.
revision:theteammembersplaywell.
2)weak:oneworker'splanistheeliminationoftardiness.
revision:oneworker'splaneliminatestardiness.
3、在以“here”或“there”開頭的句子中,把“be”動詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫句的主語。例如:
1)weak:thereisnoopportunityforpromotion.
revision:noopportunityforpromotionexists.
2)weak:herearethebooksyouordered.
revision:thebooksyouorderedhavearrived.
二、多用語意具體的動詞,保持句意簡潔明了。例如:
1、poor:mysupervisorwentpastmydesk.
better:mysupervisorsauntered(=walkedslowly)pastmydesk.
2、poor:sheisacarefulshopper.
better:sheparespricesandquality.
三、盡量運用主動語態(tài)。例如:
1、weak:theorganizationhasbeensupportedbycharity.
better:charityhassupportedtheorganization.
2、weak:thebiscuitswerestackedonaplate.
better:motherstackedthebiscuitsonaplate.
四、防止使用語意冗長累贅的詞語。例如:
1、wordy:mylittlesisterhasapreferenceforchocolatemilk.
improved:mylittlesisterpreferschocolatemilk.
2、wordy:weareinreceiptofyourletterandintendtofollowyourrmendations.
improved:wehavereceivedyourletterandintendedtofollowyourrmendation.
3、redundant:wehadaseriouscrisisatschoolyesterdaywhenourchemistrylaboratorycaughtfire.
improved:wehadacrisisatschoolyesterdaywhenourchemistrylaboratorycaughtfire.
4、redundant:mysisterandiboughtthesame,identicaldressindifferentstores.
improved:mysisterandiboughtthesamedressindifferentstores.
五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語或難懂的專業(yè)術語。例如:
1、weak:theywillnotagreetohisproposalsinanyshapeorform.
improved:theywillnotagreetoanyofhisproposals.
2、weak:ineedherfinancialinputbeforeicanguesstimateourexpendituresnextfall.
improved:ineedherfinancialfiguresbeforeicanestimateourexpendituresnextfall.
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